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在此我對每天的topic進行解析和范文精講，請大家寫完作文之后不忘進行比較，找出自己的不足之處。開始吧！

5. A company has announced that it wishes to builda large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantagesof this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory?Explain your position.

Topic 5 A factory in your community

As the company has announced to build afactory right here in our community, I am so eager to（非常迫切）say a few words toward thisissue. I really think that if the plan is carried out in the near feature finally, there will be much more disadvantages than advantages to be brought tothe quality life of our social community.（作者給出了否定的觀點，通過上下文我們感受到作者的心情時比較急切的）

Of course, during these years' highunemployment rate（高失業率）, introducingof such a large factory will consume unemployed workforce in some respects（在某些方面）. A family may increase theirincome by taking account of（考慮到）its new employed father during or after the construction of thefactory, local government can increase its tax income and retail dealers（零售商）of our community may sell alittle more because of the increasing of population that may be the result ofthe new build factory. However, all these benefits may seem to be so small when compared with all those disadvantages the new build factory may lead to.

The most hateful thing is that you may notable to smell the fresh air in the sunny Sunday mornings because this huge industrial monster will probably deliver a great deal of waste fume（煙）and waste materials（廢料）every day, far more than the amount you can imagine. And far more disappointed than this, those rumbling（隆隆不息的，形容工廠）, non-stopping stream lines in the factory can make noises loud enough to bereave people of our tranquil town out of sweat dreams.（請關注本段中量詞的用法，如the amount）

And you will no doubt feel uncomfortable to drive your family to the camping place because maybe the establishment（確立）of the new factory will bringmore than 20% increases in population as well 30% increases in using of privatecars and trucks, imaging how could it be in the street in rush hours, or evenin the holidays. So, you can see clearly that increasing in population is not always good news for a small community like ours.（工廠會增加人口，社區會變得日益擁擠）

Basic food prices may probably rise and public transportation will burden more, which usually means poor services,public schools and community facilities which once made us feel so convenient living in this small town may get harder and harder to be attended or utilizedas the increasing of population, upon all those disadvantages, why should wegive applauses to the announcement of the company?（文章寫到的不利方面還是很全面的，不過個人認為可以展開得更細一些。結尾反問句，很新穎。）

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