Okay, you had your introduction, we're talking about parents, we're talking about education, we're talking about children.
好了,開頭出來了,我們在談論的與家長有關、與教育有關、與孩子有關。
Some people believe that parents are the best, some people believe teachers are the best.
一些人認為家長是最好的,一些人認為老師是最好的。
I think that... I agree that parents are the best teachers, okay, your introduction's done.
我覺得......我同意家長是最好的老師,好了,你們的開頭寫好了。
Let's get into the first body paragraph, so, first, I'm going to read this to you.
我們來進入正文的第一段吧,首先,我要把這個讀給你們聽。
This is not a complete paragraph, but you'll get the idea.
這不是一個完整的段落,不過你們會弄懂我的想法的。
"Firstly, parents know their child best, including what he likes and doesn't like, such as books he likes to read, or favorite science topics.
“首先,家長最了解他們的孩子,包括他喜歡什么,不喜歡什么,比如他喜歡看的書,或者最喜歡的科學話題。
Parents can also talk to the child's teachers and find out from them how to help him at home.
家長還能跟孩子的老師交談,從他們那兒弄清楚在家里應該怎樣幫助孩子。
They can also monitor how much TV he watches, and cutting down on this might help his concentration..." and on and on. Okay?
他們還能監督孩子看多少電視,而且減少看電視的量也許有助于他的注意力......”然后繼續寫寫寫。
I didn't give you the full paragraph, not necessary, you'll understand what I'm getting at.
我沒有給你們完整的段落,沒有必要,你們會理解我所指的事情的。
So, common mistake number two: No topic sentence.
那么,常見錯誤二:沒有主題句。
If you look at this example, I don't know what this paragraph is about. Right?
看看這個例子,我不知道這一段是關于什么的,不是嗎?
A topic sentence is your introduction sentence to the paragraph.
主題句是這一段的引言句。
It's very important to remember that one paragraph has one central idea. Okay?
要記住一個段落有一個中心思想,這很重要。
This central idea must be presented right at the beginning of the paragraph so the reader knows what to expect.
這個中心思想必須在段落的開頭呈現,這樣讀者就知道該期待什么了。
So, in this sentence, we're talking about parents know their child, they know what he likes and what he doesn't like,
所以,在這個句子里,我們要講家長了解他們的孩子,他們了解他的好惡,
they know what books he likes, they know what science topics he likes.
他們了解他喜歡什么書,他們知道他喜歡什么科學話題。
What is this paragraph about, is it about books, is it about choosing his books or choosing his science topics,
這一段是關于什么內容的,是關于書,關于選擇他的書或者選擇他的科學話題,
is it about parents know their child, is it about what he likes, what he doesn't like?
還是關于家長了解他們的孩子,關于他喜歡什么,不喜歡什么的呢?
I'm assuming that it's: Parents know their child best, okay, so it's about the parents' knowledge of the child, that is what this paragraph is about.
我猜是:家長最了解他們的孩子,所以這是關于家長對孩子的了解,這是這一段所講的內容。
That is why they are the best teachers, because they know their child.
這是他們是最好的老師的原因,因為他們了解他們的孩子。
Put a period here, and then start with your reasons, this is your topic sentence.
在這里加一個句號,然后開始寫理由,這就是你們的主題句。
This is what the paragraph is about, stop, start giving me your support, start elaborating on this key point, and giving me the details, reasons, examples, etc.
這就是這一段的內容,在這里停下,開始給我你們支持這個觀點的理由,開始詳述關鍵點,然后給我細節、理由、例子等等。