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Too many ideas, so, this basically goes in line with the topic... no topic sentence.
太多想法基本上就等于沒有主題句。
So then, okay, they know what he likes, what he doesn't like, his books, etc.
那么，他們知道他喜歡什么，他不喜歡什么，他的書等等。
They can also talk to the child's teachers and find out how they can help him.
他們還可以跟孩子的老師交談，弄清楚他們怎樣才能幫助他。
Okay, that's another way they can do, so, teachers have nobody to ask, or maybe they have the parents, who knows?
好的，這是他們能采取的另一種方式，老師沒有人可以問，或者也許他們能問家長，誰知道呢。
So, parents know their child best, parents can talk to the child's teachers,
所以，家長最了解他們的孩子，家長能跟孩子的老師交談，.
they can find...they can monitor how much TV he watches, so they can... this is something else they can do, doesn't have anything to do with what he likes or doesn't like.
他們能發現.....他們能監督他看多少電視，這樣他們就能......這是他們能做的另一件事，跟他喜歡或不喜歡什么沒有任何關系。
They can concen-... they can help his concentration by cutting down on TV, too many ideas, here.
他們能......他們能通過減少他看電視的量幫助他集中注意力，這里的想法太多了。
Now, too many ideas is not a bad thing if each idea is expanded on, you elaborate, you explain why this is important, and you have to connect. Right?
如果每個想法都得到了擴展，你們詳細描述了、解釋了為什么這一點很重要的話，太多想法也不是件壞事，你們必須要把它們關連起來。
Every sentence must flow in terms of ideas, logically, from one idea to the next.
每個句子必須按照想法流通，有邏輯地從一個想法過渡到下一個。
So, here, this...this sentence and this sentence really have no connection, here, we're talking about what he likes; here about what they can do with their teachers.
所以，這里，這個句子和這個句子真的一點連結都沒有，這里我們講的是他喜歡什么，這里講的是他們和老師能干什么。
Two completely separate ideas, not connected by anything. Okay?
兩個完全不同的想法，沒有被任何事情連結起來。
Next, they can talk about TV, they can cut down on TV. Okay.
接下來，他們可以講講電視，他們可以減少看電視的量。
What does that have to do with talking to the child's teachers?
那和跟孩子的老師交談有什么關系？
Nothing, again, no connection, different idea.
沒有關系，再說一次，沒有聯系，不同的想法。
So the reader is going: "Umm, what are you trying to do here, like, what... what is the purpose of this essay, what is the purpose of this paragraph?"
于是讀者會想：“嗯......你在這里想干什么？這篇文章的目的是什么？這一段的目的是什么？”
The point is you're trying to support your idea, why you think parents are the best teacher.
重點是你們要努力支持自己的想法，說明你們為什么認為家長是最好的老師。
Don't just throw in ideas, which brings us to point number four:
不要光把想法扔進來，這就把我們帶到了第四點：
Good point... so, you're making good points, there's nothing wrong with the ideas, here; they're actually quite good, quite strong in terms of supporting your opinion.
言之有理......所以你們要言之有理，這些想法沒有問題，它們實際上非常好，在支持你們的觀點方面相當有力。
