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Now, to begin, on page one.
現在 先從第一頁開始
Oh, lord. Page one?
天啊 第一頁?
Now, look here, you've given eighty pages to Eugene... on the platform before the train arrives.
看這個地方 尤金在站臺上等火車 這段你都寫了整整八十頁
That is, perhaps, gilding the Lily a bit as to suspense?I mean, I'll only wait so long for a train.
是不是有些畫蛇添足 誰等火車等這么久啊 除非是在等人
When he meets the girl, you've written this.
當他遇見那個女孩時 你是這么寫的
"As Eugene's eyes became accustomed to the haze...of the cigarettes and cigars swirling miasmalike...
“正當尤金已經習慣眼前滿是煙卷 雪茄產生的煙霧 迷繞而成的混沌景象”
"he saw a woman, in serge...and gloves that crept like living tendrils... up her normally ivory arms...
“他看見一個女人 穿著嗶嘰 一雙手套 像爬藤植物一般環繞在 她本應該白皙如雪的手臂上”
"but now sunkissed as a blush...as the incarnadine discovery inside a conch shell...
“而現在她的手臂卻呈現一種迷人的紅色 就好比對世間萬物充滿好奇的動物學家”
"seen for the first time by a bewildered zoologist... as he is undone by its rosy, promising pinkness.
“第一次發現貝殼當中紅色的軀體般興奮 他被這種紅潤中透著淡淡粉色的膚色所吸引”
"Those were her arms.But it was her eyes that stopped his breath... and made his heart leap up.
“這就是她的手臂 但真正讓他心跳加速 無法呼吸的 是她那雙迷人的眼睛”
"Blue they were.Even through the swirling vapors of pompous Chesterfields... and arrogant Lucky Strikes...
“藍色的眼睛 雖然他穿著略顯浮夸的大衣 周圍煙霧彌漫 眉宇間透露著一股自大”
"he saw her eyes were a blue beyond blue, like the ocean.Blue beyond blue.
“他還是忍不住盯著 她那雙藍得動人 似大海般透徹的眼睛 藍得深沉”
"A blue he could swim into forever...and never miss a fireengine red or a cornstalk yellow.
“那是一種他愿意沉溺其中的藍 他愿意久久將其凝視 細數其中摻雜的其他顏色”
