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（一）Fire Prevention on Campus
1.前段時間校園火災頻發，造成生命和財產損失
2.分析火災發生的原因
3.作為學生，如何預防校園火災發生
●審題概述●
這是一分析火災原因和如何預防火災為中心的文章，撰寫時重點即在于此。開篇綜述校園火災頻發情形及造成的生命和財產損失，然后說明火災原因，最后提出可能的火災預防措施。第一段，主要概述；第二段，說明原因；第三段，詳細論述措施。
【范文】
Fire Prevention on Campus
People are alarmed by the succession of campus fires in recent years. In each of these accidents, heavy casualties were reported – houses were burned down, students lost their lives, and properties were damaged. Faced with such a chilling fact, people keep asking, “What on earth results in these repeated tragedies?”
A brief survey of them reveals that human factors still prove to be the leading causes. For example, three of these fires were caused by the students’ use of electric water-heaters. As students often leave the heaters unattended, the risks are rather high should the water in the bottle boil dry while no one is around to turn off the power. In other cases, fires were also caused by stoves, candles, cigarette butts, etc.
Since most of these disasters could have been prevented if proper precautions had been taken, students should be better educated on the importance and measures of fire control. The following three reminders are of particular importance for us students: First, learn how to use a fire extinguisher. Second, double-check candles, heaters, stoves and other electric appliances, and make sure there are no open flames before leaving rooms. Lastly, do not smoke in the dorm.
◇第一段思路點評：概述并引入下文
◇語言點提示：
（1）此句What on earth results in these repeated tragedies? 常可作為過渡句，引出下文
（2）注意描述有關火災客觀事實，多使用被動語態，如are alarmed by，were reported，were burned down，were damaged，Faced with。
◇第二段思路點評：論述火災的主要原因是使用電熱水器，還有造成火災的次要原因是實用電爐、蠟燭和亂扔煙蒂◇語言點提示：electric water-heaters電熱水器
◇第三段思路點評：詳述預防火災的三點措施，注意使用連接詞語first, second, lastly。
◇語言點提示：
take precautions采取預防措施
fire extinguisher滅火器
