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我已經托福三戰過了，對考試各方面都很熟悉，所以大家到考前了有什么疑惑也可以發郵件給我，我會盡力為大家解答。
每天的寫作任務是這樣的，寫好每天的作文發至我的郵箱（如果你想加入作文批改小組請注明），我們將進入互批作文模式。
在此我對每天的topic進行解析和范文精講，請大家寫完作文之后不忘進行比較，找出自己的不足之處。開始吧！
21. In general, people are living longer now.Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
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Topic 21 Why do people live longer?
With the development of human society, people are living longer now.Many factors interact together to enable a longer life. There are three most important causes: the quality of food has been greatly improved; people could have access to medical services; more and more people realize that regular sports benefit their health.
The improving quality of our food is the most important factor of the longer life. We could have not only enough food as we want, but also more healthier food. When we preparing food, we no longer consider the cost, but pay more attention to the nutritious value of the food. With the development of transportation systems, inland people now could also enjoy seafood and tropical fruit（熱帶水果）.
Furthermore, governments are paying more and more money on medical establishments. Citizens could have access to medical services more easily.Because of the convenient medical service, more illnesses could be detected at an earlier stage. Also, many illnesses that had been considered fatal（致命的）could becured（治愈）today.The better detection and cure enable people's longer life.
Last but not least, people care more for their own health.Every morning you could see people doing sports outside.More and more people have realized the saying “life is in motion."（好用的俗語，生命在于運動）Regular sports build up a strong body.Naturally, people with stronger body could resist more diseases.
To sum up, the development of our society ensures that people have longer life. People now enjoy better food and better medical services, and they spend more time on sports and exercises to build up stronger bodies. As we could predict, people are going to live even longer in the future.
好了，今天就說這么多，大家一定要堅持練習作文，每天進步一小點，一個月下來托福寫作絕對是質的提升！希望大家跟著我每天一篇練下去，寫作都是硬功夫，跟小時候每周都要寫語文作文是一樣的，功夫到家自然成，加油！
最后再mention一下互評作文的事情，這個作文互評目前只有我在做，我希望盡可能給有需要的可可粉們提供幫助，如果你們中有愿意跟我一起批改大家作文的，一定要mail我加入哦！（互批可以進步非常快，做過才知道！）
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