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每天的寫(xiě)作任務(wù)是這樣的，寫(xiě)好每天的作文發(fā)至我的郵箱（如果你想加入作文批改小組請(qǐng)注明），我們將進(jìn)入互批作文模式。
在此我對(duì)每天的topic進(jìn)行解析和范文精講，請(qǐng)大家寫(xiě)完作文之后不忘進(jìn)行比較，找出自己的不足之處。開(kāi)始吧！
16. It has recently been announced that a newrestaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose thisplan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
參考分析： 社區(qū)內(nèi)的餐館越多，競(jìng)爭(zhēng)就越激烈，那么價(jià)錢(qián)就會(huì)更公道；可能會(huì)出現(xiàn)衛(wèi)生問(wèn)題；也可能有客人酗酒鬧事(excessive drinking; get drunk and create a disturbance; make trouble after getting drunk.)。 參見(jiàn)：[5]。 |
16、同意新飯館建立 |
Topic 16 A new restaurant in your neighborhood
A new restaurant in my neighborhood would be the most exciting eventfor me. I personally have positive feelings towards this proposal（建議）and also believe that the people of my neighborhood shall also feelexcited about such an event.（不要再用agree了，換一種說(shuō)法吧，像文中的這樣feel excited about也明確地表達(dá)了作者的看法）
Life in the fast lane（這里指的是快節(jié)奏的生活）today has turned out to be sohectic（翻譯成忙碌的）and tedious（枯燥冗長(zhǎng)的）to us that at times we feelexhausted and therefore unwilling to prepare our food. We also feel a strongurge towards a change in the type and flavor（調(diào)料）of foodthat we eat. A new restaurant at such times nearby shall make a difference toour lives.（作者首先用緊張和枯燥的生活作鋪墊，從而提出一個(gè)新的餐廳換換口味可以改變生活滋味）
In occasions of（就……而言）happiness, get-togethers andenjoyment, having a restaurant nearby is always a convenience for people here.For example, the restaurant can be a convenient place to hold a weddingreception, or a birthday ceremony.（一個(gè)餐廳還可以有很多用途，從而給人們帶來(lái)聚餐的愉快與幸福）
A new restaurant shall certainly add lots of enthusiasms（熱情）and excitements to people here and people who have the greatest amountof enjoyment would be the younger people. They can relax in a new environmentwith the experience of a new atmosphere and people around and most of all,tasting something new. On the other hand, a new restaurant in our neighborhoodgives hope to young people who would like to make money through a part time orfull time job.（新建餐廳可以帶來(lái)商機(jī)）
In conclusion, a new restaurant will bring convenience to ourcommunity. So I personally welcome such a plan.
好了，今天就說(shuō)這么多，大家一定要堅(jiān)持練習(xí)作文，每天進(jìn)步一小點(diǎn)，一個(gè)月下來(lái)托福寫(xiě)作絕對(duì)是質(zhì)的提升！希望大家跟著我每天一篇練下去，寫(xiě)作都是硬功夫，跟小時(shí)候每周都要寫(xiě)語(yǔ)文作文是一樣的，功夫到家自然成，加油！
最后再mention一下互評(píng)作文的事情，這個(gè)作文互評(píng)目前只有我在做，我希望盡可能給有需要的可可粉們提供幫助，如果你們中有愿意跟我一起批改大家作文的，一定要mail我加入哦！（互批可以進(jìn)步非常快，做過(guò)才知道！）
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