第三步：挑戰權威之后帶來的benefits。

This news spread through the black community. 1People felt it was the time for them to do something. After a conversation with several ministers and civic leaders, the group decided to organize a boycott. On the next Monday, the boycott succeeded----no black people took buses in Montgomery, which 2made they decide to continue the action. 3People formed an organization call MIA, and elect Martin Luther King as their president.

問題：1 這句話太空了，而且和前文的邏輯關系也不是很清楚，建議加上Rosa的舉動鼓勵大家團結起來爭取利益。

2 應該改成make them decide to…不過值得一提的是make 這個單詞實在是比較土了，建議換成enable sb. to do. sth./或是render sb. adj 這兩個概念。

3 繼續行動，和建立組織之間嚴格說來還有一個小步驟，也就是為了讓行動更有效果，建立了……

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The imprisonment of Rosa Park discouraged and infuriated the black, who had been swallowing their anger before this incident. This time they were stimulated to rebel, rescuing the brave woman Rosa Park and more importantly wining their equal rights as an American citizen. Their plan of challenging the white（點題,引出如何進一步挑戰） began with a conference composed of several ministers and civic leaders, who decided to organize a boycott among the black, namely, refusing to ride the city’s buses until they were treated with the level of courtesy they expected, until black drivers were hired, and until seating in the middle of the bus was handled on a first-come basis. Moreover, in order to win the battle more effectively, the black formed an organization call MIA and elected Martin Luther King as their president. Their protest lasted over a year, ending when the United States Supreme Court ordered Montgomery to abolish the bus law. （這是挑戰之后的成果，廢除了公交法）

第四步：例子論述結束，進行議論，把觀點和例子結合起來。

If those black people had never fought for their rights, they would still sit 1on the back of the bus, and 2they had to give up their seats whenever white people ask. 3If they had not challenged the white people, who are authority to them, they might still live at the bottom of society.

問題：這個議論寫得還是比較精彩的，用的是虛擬語氣，從句和過去相反，主句和現在相反。

1 處有問題，坐在汽車后部？ Take a seat in the back of the bus.

2 處的they had to 和之前的they would sit 并不是完全對等，我們可以改成： They would have to take a seat in the back of the bus and give up their seats when the white section was full. 其次if 如果做虛擬，可以做結構省略，had those black people never fought for…

3 生活在社會底層這個表達還是略有點中式。

Had they never challenged their authority, the white, they might still live at the foot of the social ladder.

4 還有一個小問題就是在不寫結尾段的情況下，建議在議論部分明確的把你的觀點再重申一下。

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Had Rosa Park never refused to give up her seat（概括例子）, the black would still have to take a seat in the back of the bus and give up their seats when the white section was full. Had Rosa Park never challenged the authority for equal rights, the black might still live at the foot of the social ladder.

Thus, it is imperative to question the authority behaving irrationally. （重述觀點）

全文總結：

1 SAT作文的開頭段三步走，一明確指出觀點，二解釋為什么，三做出結構提示，即下文舉什么例子。

2 中間段的例子主要由論述和議論組成。

論述過程中要圍繞觀點來展開，分析好題目之后確定要細化的內容。本文要細化的是權威的所指，為什么挑戰，怎么挑戰以及挑戰之后的結果。

議論指的是把例子簡單總結，結合觀點。

3 高分關鍵：1）細節充實；2） 邏輯清楚；3） 語言準確。

其中第一點是可以短期提高的，給大家提供一些參考書：《維基百科》、《美國歷史重大事件及著名人物》（郝澎）（此書是中英對照） 、《外教社人物傳記叢書》（英漢對照）。 后者是我強烈建議的，內容短小精悍，包括了很多熟悉的人物，比如比爾·蓋茨、戴妃、莎翁、泰格·伍茲等等。大家可以選取1-2本，一邊看一邊做摘錄，同時多做思維練習。

4 Practice makes perfect. 相比閱讀部分，作文部分的提高還是很快的，大家把題目分好類之后，按類別準備例子，然后限時練習。