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待修房Fixer Upper
Mallory L. In my own personal experience, creativity has ensued progress. This past summer, my mother and I fixed up our rental property in Oakland, California , to make it rentable. From a leaky toilet to peeling lead paint on an overhang to a one hundred year old oven that had not been cleaned in 25 years, we had to put our heads together to create cheap solutions to these problems, because we were on a tight budget. After brainstorming for a while, my mother and I decided to bend the float lever on the toilet, which kept the water level down, scrape off the lead paint, dispose of it, and spray grey primer on it, to cover up the rusty metal, and use CLR, or Calcium, Lime, Rust remover on the oven. After sixteen hours of cleaning and fixing up, we had a quaint little house, ready to be occupied. Because we came up with creative solutions, progress followed; we rented out the house.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：Mallory把修理出租房的工作寫得很詳細(xì)，我很喜歡。她使用的短語(yǔ)“l(fā)eaky toilet and peeling lead paint”和平行結(jié)構(gòu)（斜體字）部分的作用發(fā)揮到了極致，比如“my mother and I decided to bend the float lever on the toilet, which kept the water level down, scrape off the lead paint, dispose of it, and spray grey primer on it, to cover up the rusty metal, and use CLR .”