評論
打印
本期作文題目：
Formulate a smoking policy for your office which is fair to both smokers and nonsmokers. Write a 40-50 word memo informing all staff of the policy.
老師提示：
我們需要確定，如果我是公司職員，我要在這篇memo中獲得什么信息？是不是要知道：
1.新的吸煙政策從什么時候開始；
2.吸煙區劃定在什么地方？
網友作文一：
TO: All Employees
FROM: CEO, Willan Smith
SUBJECT: NEW SMOKING POLICY
For all the employees, especially smokers,[1] plz be aware that our company's new smoking policy has been formulated as follow: A main smoking area's going to be restricted before Next MONDAY[2], anyone is not allowed to smoker in non-smoking zone even in the washing room.[3]
Plz target the smoking and non-smoking area and stick to the company's new policy.[4]
Thx.
_________________________________________
[1]去掉，抬頭已經寫過給所有的員工，所以直接從正文開始就行了，費這個事干什么？
[2]時間不確切，最好是 from next Monday. Before 這個期限是什么時候？如果不能給出確切信息，就不要說，還不如換成具體的吸煙區域更好: be restricted to the room next to the toilet.
[3]你經常在洗手間吸煙嗎？或者你們公司有這樣的同事？把這句話去掉。
[4]添加：to ensure that it is fair to all of you.
網友作文二：
To: All staff
From: Hope0068
Everybody know that smoking is dangerous for your health. And the The studies didn't just point to the ill effects of smoking on those who smoke--non-smokers, too. [1] Notice is hereby given that the smoking area is located in the special corner[2] of the first floor of this building. This come into force on[3] September 15th.
Thanks.
_________________________________________
[1]Memo 的主要作用就是提醒同事們注意事項，這和吸煙有多有害不相干，去掉。改為：to assure working environment
[2]一般的公司都應該給個room
[3]from
