2014年7月26日雅思寫作解析以及原創范文
Task one: 表格圖:
原創表格圖模板:
首段:
The given table illustrates a breakdown of ……,in general ……
點評:
句型引導,表述圖表信息,概括圖表明顯信息:
illustrate v 圖表描述……
breakdown n數據分類(特別適合表格題)
二段:
Consulting from the given chart, it is clear that ……, …… by contrast ……,again,after comparison, it seems that ……, what noteworthy is that ……
點評:
小作文可以橫向對比,縱向對比,分類對比,數據比較可從最大數據對比寫作最小數據,數據的相等,倍數,一半為特殊點,需要特殊強調。
after comparison, it seems that ……經過對比,似乎是……(經典銜接詞)
what noteworthy is that ……值得注意的是…… (經典銜接詞):
三段:
Overall,……
2014年6月27日雅思寫作回憶:
Task two:環保類:
Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others, however, believe that the problems cannot be solved unless individuals take some actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?有人認為環境問題個人無法負責,有人認為環境問題不能被解決除非個人采取行動,討論兩種觀點,給出你意見(再次原題壓中;請對比6-8月宏觀預測30題)
點評:2014年7月26日雅思小作文考察遺漏的表格圖,大作文考察個人環保如何作為(意料之中,情理之中),7月26日小范圍預測15題和6-8月宏觀預測30題全部原題壓中。環保類作為雅思寫作一類重點,歷年重復考察。每次強化寫作都會分享個性原創范文和語料庫,相信關注網雅思頻道以及背誦語料庫的童鞋們今天定能博取高分。
Many people think it is very important to protect environment but they make no effort to do it themselves. Why does it happen? How to solve this problem? 不少人認為保護環境重要, 但是沒有行動. 為什么? 如何解決?(見前博文)
點評:該文重點論證的就是環保個人不作為的原因以及環保個人如何作為。7月26日雅思題目應該論證的就是個人環保如何作為,語料庫和思路拓展融會貫通。
The environmental problem in the world can not be solved by ordinary people, and governments and large companies should be responsible for this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 環境問題個人是無法解決的,只有企業和國家才能解決,是否同意?
點評:預測的該題目和7月26日考試題目前部分完全相同,提問角度相同,只是把是否同意觀點改成了兩種觀點討論。
原創范文:
首段:背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 + 作家立場:
Ironically,we, human beings, are now facing a series of environment-related issues ranging from various contamination to global warming to the depletion of natural resources although our economy keeps on prospering. As to how to address environmental issues, an opinion seems to enjoy great popularity that personal efforts are too trivial to optimize our living surroundings, however, the issue is surely relevant to each individual citizen. (67)
翻譯:具有諷刺意味的是,盡管我們的經濟在不斷繁榮,我們人類卻面臨著一系列和環保相關的問題,諸如各種污染,全球變暖和自然資源的消耗。關于如何解決環境污染,有人傾向于認為個人努力實在微不足道,不能改善我們的生存空間,但是,環境問題和每個公民息息相關。
詞匯點評:
1. environment-related issues = environmental problem n環境污染:
2. alarmingly adv令人擔憂的是 ……
3. ranging from 從……到……
4. an opinion seems to enjoy great popularity that …… 有人認為(物稱表達代替人稱表達)
二段:第一次支持作家立場,個人環保如何作為以及細節的展開
No matter how small personal involvement in environmental conservation might be, it is the unshakable obligation of every individual to safeguard the environment. The amelioration of the environment should and could be realized by every kind of little effort. A number of examples might justify my stand, instead of depending on private cars excessively, the public should be inspired to take public transit, walk on foot or ride bicycles, which could mitigate the pollution induced by public transport. Imaginably, we could enjoy a cleaner and quieter environment if there are few vehicles on the roads. Meanwhile, provided that we have to utilize personal cars, it is highly recommend that we should purchase and drive compact cars or full-cell-driven cars. (119)
翻譯:無論個人努力在環保中顯得多么微小,保護環境是每個人不可推卸的責任。改善環境個人應該也能夠付出哪怕是微小的努力,很多例子可以支持我的立場,我們應該鼓勵公眾做公共交通工具,步行或者騎自行車,而不是過度依賴私家車。 可以想象,如果路上交通工具減少,我們可以享受更加干凈和安靜的環境。同時,假如我們不得不使用私家車,我們也應該購買小排量汽車或者電瓶環保車。
詞匯點評:
1. environmental conservation = greenism = environmental protection n 環境保護
2. safeguard the environment = improve the environment v 保護環境
3. amelioration of the environment n環境的改善
4. public transit = public transport n 公共交通工具
5. full-cell-driven cars n電瓶驅動車
三段:第二次支持作家立場,個人環保如何作為以及細節的展開。
Also, raising the environmental protection awareness and fostering eco-friendly lifestyle should be advocated among every individual. More precisely, we could reduce the frequency of use of paper and do more on-line reading, we could visit places of interest close to home instead of traveling far away to remote tourist attractions and we could save electricity and cherish water such as turning on the air conditioning only when we have to, or turning off water tap tightly.(75)
翻譯:第二,每個人應該提高環保意識以及培養環保的生活方式,具體而言,我們可以閱讀電子書籍不是紙媒書籍,我們可以周邊游不是長途游,我們可以節水節電。例如,少開空調,擰緊水龍頭。
詞匯點評:
1. raising the environmental protection awareness v提高環保意識
2. fostering eco-friendly lifestyle v培養環保生活方式
3. places of interest = tourist attractions n旅游目的地
4. turn off water tap tightly v擰緊水龍頭
四段: 讓步不同意觀點的合理性 + 加以反駁
Granted, I have to admit that some severe environmental pollution, such as global warming or sea contamination, might fail to be resolved only by personal effort. In this sense, the role of governments in environmental management is challenging but inescapable because the government is the only legalized institution that may formulate legislations related to environmental problems. However, I want to rebut that without the cooperation, participation, and honest hard work of every individual, every governmental policy relating to greenism will end up becoming useless and meaningless. (86)
翻譯:我承認,一些嚴重的環境污染問題,例如全球變暖,海洋污染,也許不能完全由個人努力解決,因此,政府在環境治理的中的責任是很有挑戰性的,但是,又是不可推卸的,因為政府是唯一合法的機構可以立法保護環境,但是,我想要反駁的是,沒有每個人的參與,合作,努力,每一項與環保相關聯的政府政策最終會是既無意義,又不起作用。
詞匯點評:
1. greenism n環境保護(來自雅思閱讀)
2. legalized institution n立法機構
3. formulate legislations v制定政策
4. end up becoming useless and meaningless. v變得無意義無作用(句型為考官滿分作文句型)
尾段:再次亮明觀點 + 總結理由
Overall,I re-affirm my stand that no matter how tiny personal efforts might be, they still work. After all, governmental policy depends on the implementation of every eco-friendly person. The earth is our shared home and every one of us should assume the responsibility of safeguarding it, not only for ourselves but also for the later generations.(58)
翻譯:
總之,我的立場是,個人努力無論多么微小,在環保中依然重要,政府的策略也要靠環保的公民來執行,地球是我們的共同的家園,我們應該承擔保護它的責任,不僅僅是為了我們自己,也是造福子孫后代。
全文點評:文無定法,原創范文只是雅思寫作范文之一種。全文擯棄模板,自由寫作。該文主題明確,邏輯清晰,論證飽滿,詞匯精準多變,摒棄華麗文風,僅用亮點詞匯點綴。應該是7.5分以上的高分范文。2014年8月2日雅思寫作小范圍調整版預測15題近期由官網雅思頻道首發。
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