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下面是2014年英語四級作文范文：網(wǎng)上購物，希望考生了解四級范文的寫作思路，增強(qiáng)自己的寫作實(shí)力。
作文話題：
Model 2 Shopping on the Net 網(wǎng)上購物
近來在一些發(fā)達(dá)地區(qū)出現(xiàn)網(wǎng)上購物熱。
一些人喜歡網(wǎng)上購物。
另一些人不喜歡網(wǎng)上購物。
四、六級作文類型：提綱式對比分析類議論文。
考點(diǎn)分析：
本文屬對比分析類議論文，也有人將其歸類于對比比較類或匹配對比類作文。此類作文要求對同種或兩種事物進(jìn)行比較，然后得出結(jié)論。嚴(yán)格地說比較類的作文一般要求比較一件事物正反、優(yōu)劣等，然后下結(jié)論;而對比類作文大多是對兩個(gè)事物或兩種觀點(diǎn)從兩方面進(jìn)行比較，再提出自己的看法。
本文實(shí)際上是從客觀公正的角度對比網(wǎng)上購物與傳統(tǒng)購物。文章首先指出如今網(wǎng)絡(luò)時(shí)代我們在網(wǎng)上無所不能，網(wǎng)上購物悄然受到人們青睞。隨即圍繞網(wǎng)上購物這一中心議題提出兩種不同態(tài)度。一些人喜歡網(wǎng)上購物，他們認(rèn)為與傳統(tǒng)購物方式相比，它快捷、方便、省時(shí)，選擇面大。實(shí)際上他們是拿網(wǎng)上購物的長處比傳統(tǒng)購物的短處。而另一些人對此不感興趣，他們對假冒偽劣產(chǎn)品十分謹(jǐn)慎，很怕上當(dāng)受騙。這些人是拿傳統(tǒng)購物長處比網(wǎng)上購物的短處，最后作者得出結(jié)論：網(wǎng)上購物勢必會發(fā)展成不可抗拒的新的購物趨勢。
審題構(gòu)思：
“網(wǎng)上購物“屬提綱式作文。根據(jù)題中所給漢語提示句提示，本文可用三段式的謀篇形式。開篇段照應(yīng)提綱開門見山地指出目前不僅出現(xiàn)了“上網(wǎng)熱”，而且出現(xiàn)了“網(wǎng)上購物熱”――Nowadays many people tend to shop on the net。隨后在第二和第三段中闡明對網(wǎng)上購物的兩種不同觀點(diǎn)，并就此展開討論。最后用一句話得出結(jié)論。因此第二段的主題句應(yīng)為：Some people prefer this new way of shopping。第三段主題句為：Others dislike the new trend of shopping。結(jié)論為：I believe it is an irresistible trend of shopping in the 21st century。全文和各段落具體框架結(jié)構(gòu)如下：
全文構(gòu)思：
1.Nowadays many people tend to shop on the Net.
2.Some people prefer this new way of shopping.
3.Others dislike the new trend of shopping.
段落構(gòu)思
第一段：Topic Sentence Nowadays many people tend to shop on the Net.
Developing Sentence 1 Internet is revolutionizing our world.
Developing Sentence 2 We can do many things online.
第二段： Topic Sentence Some people prefer this new way of shopping..
Developing Sentence convenient and time-saving
第三段： Topic Sentence others dislike the new trend of shopping.
Developing Sentence fear of buying fake commodities
新詞拾貝
online網(wǎng)上;在線
on the WebNet網(wǎng)上
Website網(wǎng)站
Web page網(wǎng)頁
e-commerce電子商務(wù)
e-business電子商務(wù)
virtual shopping center網(wǎng)上虛構(gòu)的購物中心
絕妙銜接
Nowadays,… As a matter of fact,… To illustrate,… However,…
Some…First, …besides, … Most important of all,…
However, others…First, …Besides,…Finally,… However,…
良好開端
Nowadays Internet is revolutionizing our world and greatly facilitating our modern life, so that we can do many things on the Net.
Nowadays, with the arrival of knowledge economy age, we can do many things on the Web, such as conducting e-business, buying and selling stocks and even shopping at home via the Internet.
Nowadays, we can do many things via Internet. To illustrate, we can conduct e-commerce ,buy and sell stocks, buy train or air tickets and even shop on the Net.
Nowadays, shopping at home via Internet is becoming popular in many parts of the country.
成功收口
Therefore, they don’t think it’s the best way to shop on the Web.
Therefore, they doubt whether its advantages can outweigh its disadvantages, hence, they still continue their old practice.
Therefore, they didn’t show any interest in online shopping.
Therefore, they find it difficult to adopt the new way of shopping and still stick to he old way.
組段成篇
讀讀范文，看看文章的謀篇方式。先談悄然興起的網(wǎng)上購物熱，引出中心議題“人們對網(wǎng)上購物的兩種不同觀點(diǎn)”。最后作者從中得出自己的結(jié)論。
