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Computer and I ( By Simmy )
I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly 替換 very
thrilling 替換 exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替換 sb. be interested in sth.
google 替換 search
an army of 替換 a lot of
The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一個精彩句型，用來描述在某個時期發生了什么事情; Increasing popularity 替換 more and more popular
Coincident with … 非常地道的句型，表達“與…一致”的意思，替換 With …
Advancement 替換 development
Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替換 enter into
Current ( currently )替換 now
Appeal to sb. 替換 sb. be interested in sth.
Growing individuals 替換 more and more people
It is no exaggeration to say 經典句型， 說某事是毫不夸張的
