1. 盡量避免重復使用同樣的詞匯。或者有的時候雖然詞匯沒有重復,但意思卻有重復。這時候可以做一些簡化的工作。例如下面這個例子:
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.
large 對一個farm來說就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改為:
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.
更簡潔的表達方式為:
My grandfather grew up on a large farm.
2. 有時一個詞組可以用一個更簡單的單詞來替換,例如:
My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents’ farm.
這里的over and over again就可以改為repeatedly,顯得更為簡潔:
My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents’ farm.
3. 把從句改為短語或單詞。例如:
Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.
簡介的表達方式為:
The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university.
4. 僅在需要強調賓語而不是主語的時候,才使用被動語態。例如:
In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather’s family.
本句不夠簡潔的原因是本句的重心應該是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather’s family”,而使用了被動語態后,仿佛重心變成了cows和hay。下面的表達方式是主動語態,相對來說更簡潔一些:
In the fall, my grandfather’s family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.
5. 用更為精確的一個動詞來代替動詞短語,例如下面這句話:
My grandfather didn’t have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.
Stand around doing nothing其實可以用一個動詞來表達,即loiter:
My grandfather didn’t have time to loiter with his school friends.www.Examw.com
6. 有時兩句話的信息經過組合完全可以用一句話來簡練地表達,例如:
Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree.
兩句話的信息可以合并為下面這句更為簡潔的句子:
Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree.
簡單并不代表沒有難度,一篇好的托福作文,必須邏輯清晰、詞匯和句式運用恰當。如果考生對長句沒有太大的把握,那么不妨拆成更有把握的短句,一樣能獲得高分。