話題五：Is identity something people are born with or given, or is it something people create for themselves?

　　學(xué)生習(xí)作：

　　In my opinion, identity is just something people create for themselves.
　　People all born the same, their identities, just like their names, are just what they are given.
　　For better illustration, I will take my father as the instance.

　　分析：有語法的問題，更重要的也是邏輯的問題。

　　該同學(xué)的原意是表達(dá)人生來一樣（值得商榷的），但是后來變得不一樣的，所以個(gè)性一定就是后天創(chuàng)造的。但可惜的是表達(dá)出的句子意思沒有到位，有點(diǎn)中國人寫作說一點(diǎn)留一點(diǎn)對方想的意味，這是很恐怖的。

　　修改：

　　Admittedly, family background plays a crucial role when one starts out his life.
　　But it is what one experiences later in his life that finally shapes his character.
　　To be more specific, failures render you more determined.

　　Next I will take the example of Lance Armstrong to prove my point.
　　
話題六：Should new ideas be questioned?（2009年11月考題）

　　同學(xué)文章：

　　Although new ideas originate from creation and self-discovery, which should be encouraged, there are still needs for us to question them. We often have no existing experience related to new ideas for them being unprecedented; the new ideas are by no means a hundred percent correct. To be more specific, it is worthwhile for us to question these ideas so as to ensure their accuracy.

　　In 1804, the Theory of Atom, a new idea introduced by Joan Dalton, a British chemist and physicist, is such an example.

　　分析：整體很好，就是說理較為啰唆。

　　修改：
　　New ideas, never happening before, may be wrong to some extent. That is the reason why we are supposed to challenge them to ensure their correctness for the better development of science.

話題七：Do people achieve more success by cooperation or by competition?

　　I consider that collaboration is more beneficial than 1work own. Those people 2work together have their different strong points.
　　Thus, they can accomplish a common target by cooperation.
　　On the other hand, if everybody 3 are in a competition they may fight like 4Kilkenny cats.

　　分析：
　　1. working by oneself/on one’s own
　　2.一個(gè)句子怎么能有兩個(gè)謂語動(dòng)詞
　　3.主謂不一致
　　4.筆者知識(shí)有限一下子就被這個(gè)詞組阻斷了思維，后來查證之后發(fā)現(xiàn)表示打架不顧死活。

　　不過還是建議各位考試時(shí)盡量別用太過生僻的說法，寫作是為了讓對方理解，不是要去challenge 對方。

　　修改：
Those people working together have their own strong points that others may draw on or learn from. By collecting the wisdom of every member, the whole team is more likely to accomplish a target.
　　On the other hand, competition may likely to exhaust a person when he, confronted with certain obstacles, has nobody to turn to.