話題一：Does fame bring happiness, or are people who are not famous more likely to be happy?

學生文章

1）In my opinion, though the joy of life depends entirely on personal view to the world, fame are easier to bring happiness than ordinary people.

問題：
　　1 .這個句子的“雖然但是”之間的邏輯有問題。
　　2 .fame不可數，比較對象有問題。

修改：From my point of view, it is easier for the wealthy to obtain happiness than ordinary people.

2）Due to fame people can earn enough money to do whatever they would like to do. However, ordinary person may be worried about starvation and medical expense. I will take my friend for an example.

　　問題：
　　1. whatever 太絕對。
　　2. however, 這個詞表示但是，主要用作插入語。表示但是還可以用By contrast, on the contrary。
　　3. 舉例子的詞組單調了，a good case in point is that…; A typical/perfect/convincing/persuasive example can be found in …; to illustrate 等等都可以表示要舉例子。

　　修改：體現對比（選擇類）
　　Fame could render a person more able to earn money so as to do things that he really prefers. By contrast, an ordinary man may have to struggle with various difficulties resulting from poverty, which discourages him from doing things that could really improve his sense of happiness.

話題二：Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame and power?

　　這是一個比較難的題目，良心還是錢？寫這個題目大部分同學的問題就是比較空。