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151. What is the most important animal in your country? Why is the animal important? Use reasons and specific details to explain your answer.
參考分析： 可以假裝你是日本人，說三文魚很重要；也可以假裝你是韓國人，說狗很重要；可以假裝你是美國人，說鸚鵡很重要；當然，就算你不加裝他國人士，也可以相出很多動物，起碼，熊貓可以想到吧？如果你長在草原，馬很重要；如果你長在農(nóng)村，牛很重要。 要我寫，我會寫——豬。小時候就寫過文章《豬——渾身是寶》 |
151、選擇的動物是狗 |
Topic 151 The most important animal
My homeland Taiwan is well known for its great and diverse possession of animals. However, among this great variety of animals, Taiwanese deer is the most important and unique animal. This beautiful animal saved my ancestors from starvation in their pioneer days, and what's more, it symbolizes the beauty of my homeland Taiwan.
When my ancestors first came to the Island of Taiwan, they had nothing except a few pieces of clothing and tools. As they were facing hunger, they caught the glimpse of a beautiful deer in silky beige fur and snowwhite spots. Astonished at the sight of such a stunning creature, they appreciated God for bestowing them such a precious gift. The deer saved my ancestors from starvation, and hence, my people worship it as the gift from God. Were it not for the Taiwanese deer, my ancestors would not have survived, and I also would not be sitting here writing this essay.
Moreover, Taiwanese deer symbolizes the dazzling beauty of my homeland---the Taiwan Island. Taiwan has been famous for the name "Formosa" which means "beautiful" given by a Portuguese explorer in the1600's. Its beauty is celebrated worldwide. Moreover, the Taiwanese deer is widely recognized as one of the most beautiful kinds of deer. It acquires silky fur of the color of cedar, covered by little white spots that spread out like stars in the sky. In addition, I can proudly and positively say the only place on the Earth where you can find a Taiwanese deer is the Taiwan Island. Every characteristic of the deer matches my beautiful homeland perfectly, and the deer is the best representative of my homeland.
Overall, although there are various animals living in my homeland, Taiwanese deer is the most important one as it was the food that saved my ancestors and it represents my homeland. Unfortunately, this incredible creature now is facing extinction. I genuinely hope by writing this essay my voice can be heard and people will try to save the Taiwanese deer.
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