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原創范文：警察是否應該配槍上街
首段：背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 + 作家立場
Alarmingly, the rate of manifold perpetrations keeps on soaring,which not onlyafflicts the sufferersbut also jeopardizes the security of the community.Therefore, it is not rare to see thatmany police officers carry gunwhenfulfilling the tasks.People have been debating whether or not policeman is supposed to carry guns to patrol the street.Personally, it is preferable and viable to allow theguard of the peopleto carry gunsalthoughsome potential problems should be stressed.
新東方薛鵬翻譯：令人擔憂的是，各類犯罪不斷上升，不僅僅使受害者痛苦，也威脅到社會的安定。因此，警察在執行任務的時候配槍十分常見。人們一直在在爭議警察在上街巡邏的時候是否應該配槍。我認為，人民衛士配槍上街是可取可行的，經管其弊端應該被強調。
新東方薛鵬點評：文風有樸素之美，也有華麗之美，小鵬哥范文寫作即為才藝展示。文章首句即為亮劍，用到很多8級詞匯，接下來的文風保持一致，該范文適合賞析，不適合考生仿寫。
新東方薛鵬詞匯點評：(將閱讀詞匯運用為積極的寫作詞匯)
manifold adj 多種形式的;
soar v 激增;
afflicts v 使痛苦;
jeopardize v 危害到……
guard of the people 人民衛士
二段：讓步段：警察配槍上街的潛在弊端(二點讓步)
Granted， permitting the police officer to take guns might,to some extent, arouse some felons’ impulse of conducting some anti-social offences,especiallyfor those hardened violators.More precisely, some gangsters never fail to curse and resent the societywhichthey think unfair. The impulse of taking revenge on the society might be stimulatedwhenthey see all the cops are equipped with guns.Also, withouta strict legislation of the possible abuse of gun, weapons might hurt the man in the street accidently.
新東方薛鵬翻譯：的確，準許警官配槍某種程度上可能誘發重刑犯的犯罪沖動，他們容易做出反社會行為，尤其對于一些慣犯而言。具體來說，很多幫派分子歷來詛咒和憎恨他們認為不公平的社會，警官配槍上街可能刺激他們報復社會的沖動。另外，缺乏對可能的槍支濫用的立法規范，武器的使用可能意外傷及大眾百姓。
新東方薛鵬點評：雅思寫作中考官不喜歡看到太多的套語，認為這是背誦和抄襲的能力，因此，小鵬哥行文淡化路標詞匯。
新東方薛鵬詞匯點評：
to some extent adv 某種程度上，插入語的使用讓文章顯得活潑。
conducting some anti-social offences v 做出反社會行為(犯罪的升級寫法);我不相信考官會喜歡 break the law 或者 commit crime 這樣的白開水表達。
taking revenge on ……報復 …… (6級詞匯)
the man in the street n 百姓(來著1998年朱镕基總理的政府工作報告英文版)
三段：反駁段：警察配槍的利好(三點展開)
Nevertheless, the merits ofencouraging policemen to carry gun when they are on dutyfar outweighits possible downsides. First, it will have a deterrent role to play in preventing and stopping potential violators from recommitting new crimes.In other words, many malefactors may look before they leap when seeing all the policemen are equipped with guns.Also, guns are,indeed, reliable helpers of the police officers. When the police force encounter some unexpected emergency,it isthe gunthatrescue them from harm.Last, during the organized riot, police officers with guns could effectively put an end to the chaosso thatthe public security can be ensured and a more stable society can be maintained.
新東方薛鵬翻譯：然而，鼓勵警察配槍執行任務利大于弊。第一，這可以預防或者阻止潛在的犯罪行為。換言之，當看到警官們全副武裝的時候，很多潛在的犯罪分子會三思后行。第二，槍支的確是警官們的好助手，當警官們遇到意外的緊急情況時，槍支可以保護他們。第三，在有組織的暴亂期間，全副武裝的警官可以有效地終結混亂，因此，公眾安全得以保障，社會穩定得以維持。
新東方薛鵬點評：反駁段要三點反駁。雅思寫作的思路拓展一定要平時積累，我喜歡看今日說法或者天網欄目。我有每日閱讀新浪和鳳凰的習慣。打擊犯罪的話題是在中國新疆反恐;重慶打黑;個別警官濫用槍支等大背景下考察的，這也是緊扣時代脈搏。
新東方薛鵬詞匯點評： so that 引導結果從句;can be ensured 使用被動表達，是否有些雅思閱讀的感覺。
