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Part I Writing
A 【標準版】
Man and Computer
Ever since the birth of it, the computer has largely changed human being’s life and there has been a hot debate about its effects on humans. Undeniably, computers have taken the place of humans in many areas and it seems that computers begin to think like man, but this does not necessarily lead to the danger that man will think like computers.
The reasons, in my opinion, are as follows. Firstly, when computers release human from repetitive tasks, humans themselves can spend more time on creative works, such as scientific research, which require imagination and cannot be completed by computers. Meanwhile, thanks to computers, humans get more spare time with their friends and family, which enhances their happiness. Moreover, even though computers can work automatically, the premise is that the program, which is written by humans, has been installed in it.
In conclusion, humans, unlike computers, have creative ability, emotional desires and social bounds. Thus, I don’t think that there will be the danger that man will begin to think like the computer.
【高分版】
Man and Computer
It is believed that the computer is bringing the world into a brand new era. At the time the computer was invented, scientists, marveling at its calculating speed, felt that they had created a miracle. Nowadays, the function of the computer is no longer confined to calculation; it permeates people’s daily lives and has become an inseparable part of human society.
People become so heavily dependent on computers that it is hard to imagine the life without computers. Therefore, some people are worried that “The real danger is not that the computer will think like man, but man will think like the computer.” Their concern does make sense. Indeed, some people spend such a long time working on computers that they have few interactions with people in real life. According to a research, too many hours in front of a computer may lead to a poker face and interpersonal isolation. This fact should arouse our attention, because unlike computers, human beings are social creatures that need emotional connections with others.
Yet, it is also unnecessary for us to be overwhelmed by the negative impacts of computers. After all, we humans are intelligent and will be able to figure out better ways to make improvements.
本次六級作文的題目是人與電腦，對“真正的危險不是電腦開始像人一樣思考，而是人開始像電腦一樣思考。”這句話發表自己的觀點。題目不算新，一般考生對此都比較熟悉，所以對考生來說難度不大。寫好這篇作文，需要抓住兩點，一是緊跟題目要求，即對這句引言做出評論，二是在評論的基礎上要亮出自己的觀點。
范文第一段首先 陳述電腦自發明以來對人們生活的深刻的影響， 從而為第二段內容的陳述奠定基礎。
第二段第一句話先自然地過渡，引出題干中的引言。對引言作出評價：這樣的擔憂確實不是空穴來風。然后用例子證明現代生活中電腦已經對人們的思維和習慣帶來的負面影響。呼吁大家引起重視，因為人畢竟不同于電腦，是有情感需求的。
最后一段是一個轉折， 提出對于電腦對人的影響也不用太悲觀，因為人畢竟是有智慧、有主觀能動性的， 一定會想出改善不足的方法。這樣的轉折使作者的觀點更全面、有說服力。
B【標準版】
On Maintaining Trust
Trust is the most frequently used word when we are talking about interpersonal relationships. However, it is hard to build trust but easy to destroy it. Therefore, how to build and maintain trust is very important for us. In my opinion, some factors play a primary role in it.
First comes honesty. There’s an old saying in Chinese: once bitten, twice shy. Thus, never lie to your partners. If they find out you’re lying or cheating, the existing trust will be broken. Once broken, it’s always hard to rebuild it. Promise-keeping is the second one. If you always break your promise, you will not be trusted by others any more. Another important aspect is attitude. People with good attitude are always welcome. They show their good manners, patience, modesty, willingness to communicate and, most important of all, sincerity to others, which contributes greatly to eliminating apathy and coldness.
There are, still, other influential factors. However, from my perspective, honesty, promise-keeping and good attitude stand out among them.
【高分版】
On maintaining trust
Trust is a key strategy for building effective relationships with the people we come into contact with, including our team members, peers and customers. If you want to have a positive influence over anyone or anything, you need to earn trust first.
As the level of trust develops, however, there will be situations and incidents that shake the foundations that have been built. Therefore, maintain trust is even more important. There are several keys to maintain trust. First is integrity. You need to remain honest and morally upright. The second is stick to your words. If you say you would do something, then do it, otherwise never say it. For once you break your promises, you can hardly reestablish it.
Trust is built and maintained by many small actions over time. Trust is telling the truth, even when it is difficult, and being truthful, authentic, and trustworthy in your dealings with other people. Only by maintain trust can one make real achievements and enjoy a rewarding life.
