評論
打印
Part I Writing
標準版
With the help of the ever rapid development of internet technology, online shopping is coming into fashion in most of cities.
Online shopping is welcomed by most people due to various reasons. From the perspective of consumer, it can save some time for people who don't have much spare time. Just click the mouse, they can get whatever they want while staying at home. For the retailers, it can cut some costs for those who don't have much circulating funds. They don't have to rent a house and spend money on employees compared with the traditional trade mode. However, there are still some defects in online shopping. First, lace of face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. Second, people will lose the fun of bargain.
It is undeniable that shopping on the internet has become an irresistible trend in modern society. It's of great urgency that we need to regulate the relative laws accordance with the rapid growth of online shopping. Only in this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping without the concern of being treated.
點評：
本次四級作文探討的是最近的熱點話題之一——互聯網網購。目前網購的風靡程度是眾所周知，因此，考生對于該話題還是比較熟悉的。但是，比較特殊的是，題干所列出的要求的是考生從一個客觀的角度來闡述該話題，而不是簡單陳述自己的意見。所以，考生應當審清楚題，在寫作時不僅僅要列出網購的優點，還必須給出相應的缺點。
按照四級作文的要求，考生在第一段時應該總述現象并引出話題；
第二段考生應當從正反兩方面來論述網購，分別鋪陳其優缺點；關于優點，網購的優點很多，考生可擇其最突出顯著的方面來闡述，比如說網購可以節省很多時間；網購可以節省很多成本開支等；其次，缺點方面考生可以把重心放在誠信方面；為了不至于跟優點相比，缺點方面太輕，考生可以考慮稍微提一下其他缺點，比如說與傳統購物相比，網購少去了很多砍價的樂趣；
第三點要求考生對于第二段列出的缺點給出自己的建議。此處我們可以根據第二段列出的缺點方面給出相應的防范應對措施。
整篇作文話題比較好展開，難度不大，只要考生審好題，列出相應點，相信作文不會他是難題。
外教版
Online shopping has been a boon to many industries and companies looking to expand their markets. Also, it's convenient for shoppers who are too busy to leave the house. However, in some cases nothing can replace a true face to face shopping experience.
Internet shopping is convenient for the mothers who spend all day doing house chores and for the fathers who work a full-time job. On the other hand, there are limits to shopping online, for example: guessing the correct size of clothing on a computer screen can be very frustrating.
For the busy mother and father, online shopping is a very useful and convenient tool. But, there are instances, like clothes shopping, where nothing beats the real thing.
點評：
作者在第一段描述了網購作為一種時尚給大家的生活帶來了便利，然后話鋒一轉，說網購仍然取代不了面對面的購物交流。
第二段主要還是從正反兩方面分析了網購的優勢和不足，以此描述大家對網購的不同反應。
第三段作者表明了自己的觀點，對網購的便利和不足之處都做了描述。
綜合來講，本篇文章觀點明確，結構清晰，語言表達地道，有不少閃光詞匯，但是，內容深度上來講還有些欠缺，另外，最后一部分表達個人觀點，和第二段稍有重復。考生需要注意觀點的清晰，不宜模棱兩可。
