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(二)草擬提綱
段落一闡述問題段①開門見山，綠色校園引發(fā)人們關(guān)注;②建立綠色校園對(duì)自己、他人及社會(huì)都有重要影響。
段落二說明原因段①綠色校園具有兩層含義;②綠色，無污染;③人文精神、文明建設(shè)、人文關(guān)懷、和諧。
段落三解決方法段①為了建設(shè)綠色校園，個(gè)人、學(xué)校、政府和社會(huì)各界應(yīng)該采取哪些措施;②對(duì)未來的展望。
根據(jù)以上構(gòu)思，寫作提綱如下：
Creating A Green Campus
What’s a green campus and how to creat a green campus?
Creating A Green Campus
I.Nowadays the topic of a green campus has aroused public attention.
1.It is of vital importance to the students
2.It has a profound impact on society
II.The idea of “a green campus” is beyond a green environment.
1.green environment preservation and protection
2.a civilized atmosphere for students’ mental health
III.It is imperative for us to take effective measures to creat a green campus.
1.The law and regulations should be worked out
2.Enhanced the awareness of the students themselves
(三)落筆寫作
1.闡述問題段 根據(jù)題目中的提綱，首先強(qiáng)調(diào)建立綠色校園的重要性，最好在此句之前做一個(gè)鋪墊，介紹建立綠色校園受到人們廣泛關(guān)注這一背景信息，即the topic of a green campus has aroused public attention.
常見問題：用詞匱乏。如：“很重要” important。
使用對(duì)策：使用精彩替換詞。如：the indispensable part for, has a profound impact on, significance等。
2.說明原因段 對(duì)綠色校園的兩方面含義進(jìn)行論述。另外在展開論證過程中，抽象句子要舉例說明，如：such as planting more trees and flowers, for example, students will be severely punished in case of cheating in exams，這些具體信息使文章更生動(dòng)，容易理解。
常見問題：結(jié)構(gòu)不清，缺乏層次感。
使用對(duì)策：要注意各個(gè)理由之間的邏輯關(guān)系，適當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用表示層次關(guān)系的詞語，如：to begin with, in addition to; furthermore/not only … but also …/ what’s more; for example/for instance/such as; in other words/ in particular等。
本文的說明原因段可分為如下三個(gè)層次進(jìn)行論證：
?、匍_門見山：首先對(duì)“綠色校園”在下文要涉及的內(nèi)容進(jìn)行總體概括：The idea of “a green campus” is beyond a green environment.
②正面論證：說明“綠色校園”的第一層含義，也就是我們最熟知的一層含義，即campus construction refers to green environment preservation and protection。然后舉例進(jìn)一步解釋此含義，并強(qiáng)調(diào)其重要性：which makes campus an ecological and natural resort.在這個(gè)過程中考生要注意亮點(diǎn)詞匯以及句型的使用。
?、鄯疵嬲撟C：使用in addition to引出“綠色校園”的第二層含義，即create a civilized atmosphere for the sake of students’ mental health.然后舉例進(jìn)一步解釋此含義。如：For example, students will be severely punished in case of cheating in exams and plagiarizing in academic papers.
